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Cabin Pressure/Sherlock fic: Initially, he wanted to be a pilot - coda 
5th-Sep-2013 11:36 am
Martin and Sherlock
Title: Initially, he wanted to be a pilot – coda
Author: Ariane DeVere


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Outside the wall of the hospital grounds, the man looked at his watch. Although there was no activity inside the grounds and everything remained quiet, the fact that his boss hadn’t yet returned meant that he had almost definitely been compromised.

It was time to put Phase 2 into action.

He lifted his radio to contact his operatives inside the hospital.

“Operation Birling Day is go,” announced Douglas Richardson.


The End.

Definitely.






Author’s Note: When my plotbunny first shoved this idea into my head several months ago, I stared into her innocent furry face and asked in disbelief, “You want me to write what?! Are you mad?! You want me to deny the existence of everyone from ‘Cabin Pressure’ and make Arthur – Arthur Shappey – the Big Bad?! Are you trying to get me killed to death by angry readers?” She coolly met my gaze, then waved a dismissive paw and said, “Write it, bitch,” before turning away and going back to canoodling with one of my teddy bears.

Thinking that I knew the perfect person to help me, I emailed verityburns and told her the general gist of the story. Totally unhelpfully she replied that she loved the idea. This was not what I needed to hear at all.

Then I thought of chocolamousse. She doesn’t like her favourite characters going through bad things, and she loves shipping them, so surely she would disapprove of this idea with lots of bad things and no (well, barely any) (well, maybe a bit of) ship, and would talk me out of writing it. By now I had reluctantly started plotting out the storyline and had already written an eight-page synopsis. I never write synopses – if the story doesn’t come into my mind with the basic structure fully formed, it stays in my head until it’s in better shape. But I had thumped out this massive synopsis, so I sent it to Chocola with a “Look at this – it’s a terrible idea, isn’t it?” message.

She wrote back with loads of ideas of how to improve it.

Damn. This was not the kind of help I had been seeking. What the hell was the matter with my idiot friends?!

Mirith! Mirith Griffin would save me! She had to save me! Because despite the ever-expanding synopsis, I still didn’t want to write this angsty painful story which only about six people would read, and someone had to talk me out of it. I sent the document off to her and sat back, confident of getting a reply along the lines of, “Good grief, woman, what are you thinking?! Step away from the bunny, step away from the computer, go to your room and think about the ridiculousness of what you’re planning here.”

Instead, she said she was looking forward to seeing the story done, and added a ton of advice about certain aspects which she thought I really shouldn’t include in their current format, together with suggestions of how to change them.

I have No Friends.

But despite them being absolutely No Help At All in putting off my demented plotbunny, my eternal grateful thanks go to Verity, Mirith and Chocola for all their suggestions, encouragement and improvements. In particular Verity invented a much better major plot point than I had done regarding what Bambi was planning for Sherlock once he had been turned into Martin, and came up with the ‘promise of love, pain of loss, joy of redemption’ explanation of why Bambi gave Martin a princess girlfriend (when I was about to take the princess girlfriend out of the story altogether). She also made the oh-so-obvious-but-I-didn’t-think-of-it suggestion that John should take the name ‘Jack’ (your humble idiot of an author was going to call him ‘Jeremy’ [*cringes at the memory*]), stopped me from making Martin into far too much of a wimp, and then carefully betaed the whole monstrosity. Twice. Chocola came up with the idea that Mr. Gregory should give Martin a laptop to prove that he was telling the truth, and made other superb suggestions including the ‘I’m a tea lady, not your housekeeper’ and the ‘invade Afghanistan’ lines. And additionally and essentially, if it hadn’t been for Mirith’s careful reading of the finished draft and her diplomatic pointers on how not to treat a psychiatric patient, even more readers would have been angrily throwing things at the screen regardless of the disclaimer at the beginning. Oh, and she also taught me how to spell “Oi”.

Sorry about the coda. It came to me ages after I’d finished the story, and was the result of me idly thinking about how this was an unusual style for me, pointing out the plot twist so early on and having the readers one step ahead of at least one of the characters, with no twist at the end. Apparently my plotbunny latched on to my thoughts and promptly had an “ooh!” moment. It didn’t really surprise me. She doesn’t like a straightforward happy ending.

I didn’t show the coda to anyone before publishing it. So Verity, Mirith and Chocola will probably be in the front of the queue of people wanting to kill me with sticks.

But I giggled evilly to myself when, half an hour after writing the coda, I realised the full significance of calling Phase 2 ‘Operation Birling Day’. After all, what’s the main point of Birling Day? Answer: stealing the Talisker. So who is the Talisker here? Is it Sherlock or Bambi? Mwah-ha-ha-ha ...

Can I just make it clear right now: There will not be a sequel. You know my methods: finish it on a cliffhanger and leave the reader to decide what happens next.

Finally, my sort-of apologies to the writer formerly known as Danlef but who has now taken the username squire on AO3, who published an awesome multi-chapter Sherlock/Star Trek Into Darkness crossover fic called You should have let him sleep during June and July while I was still in the planning stages of Initially. When I finally got round to reading her completed story on the train over the course of a few days it had me severely head-desking (which is not easy on a train that has no desks), because the themes of her and my stories were so painfully similar that I seriously wondered whether to ditch mine. Then I comforted myself with the ‘great minds think alike’ concept and I just hope nobody thinks that I was in any way plagiarising her idea. ’Cause I honestly wasn’t.

Or maybe she owns my plotbunny’s twin sister?

In which case, she has my sympathies.

********

ETA: Having sworn that there wouldn’t be a sequel, there now sort-of is one. It’s called Two two one bee.



Comments 
5th-Sep-2013 10:10 pm (UTC)
“Operation Birling Day is go,” announced Douglas Richardson.
Is Douglas going to steal Mycroft's whisky? Is Snoopadoop going to play the Hound? I refuse to angst. *clings to her happy ending*

surely she would disapprove of this idea with lots of bad things and no (well, barely any) (well, maybe a bit of) ship, and would talk me out of writing it
As long as John doesn't leave Sherlock at the end... Or doesn't die... *looks at you sternly*

So Verity, Mirith and Chocola will probably be in the front of the queue of people wanting to kill me with sticks.
Oh look, a kidney dish. And it's full, on top of that.

So who is the Talisker here? Is it Sherlock or Bambi?
IT IS BAMBI. THERE IS NO ROOM FOR DEBATE ON THAT. NO ANGST.

You know my methods: finish it on a cliffhanger and leave the reader to decide what happens next.
Oh, you mean like in Dreamer?

So, now that you've posted your clever and gasp-and-nail-biting-inducing story, you're of course aware that the next thing you'll write will have to be super-fluffy in order to make up for it, aren't you? *looks at you with hope*
6th-Sep-2013 09:28 am (UTC)
Fluff!! Fluff is good! I need fluff now please!
6th-Sep-2013 10:58 am (UTC)
Oh, yes please! *Adds to the demands for fluff*

Who's with me?

7th-Sep-2013 04:56 pm (UTC)
Oh look, a kidney dish

*gulps* I hope it's a cardboard one.

you're of course aware that the next thing you'll write will have to be super-fluffy

*looks at the next story which I've already written*

*looks to see if there's any fluff*

*gulps again*

*runs and hides from flying kidney dishes*
6th-Sep-2013 09:30 am (UTC)
See, that's what I get for putting my shock blanket away before reading your coda. Of course I was thinking that the coda would have some well deserved fluff after all this torture, but no, this is Ari we're talking about. I'll just keep it where I can reach it, ok?
6th-Sep-2013 11:57 am (UTC)
Oh, and I forgot to tell you how much I love and enjoy your athor's notes! They are simply brilliant. That's it.
7th-Sep-2013 04:59 pm (UTC)
This is the umpteenth time I've been praised for my author's notes! I'm seriously wondering whether I should just write ANs in future and not bother with the fic! But thanks - I'm glad you liked it.
8th-Sep-2013 07:37 pm (UTC)
Don't you f**ng dare stop wirting fic DeVere or we'll come after you with torches and pitchforks!
9th-Sep-2013 12:42 pm (UTC)
Torches, pitchforks, broom handles, kidney dishes (full) ... I knew there was a reason I should have kept the bunny quiet! I could have quietly faded into the background and nobody would have noticed, and now I have a slavering mob chasing after me!

I hate Mondays.
7th-Sep-2013 04:58 pm (UTC)
Yeahhhhh, sorry about that. Let that be a warning to you - never put the blanket away until DeVere has got it all out of her system.
6th-Sep-2013 09:47 am (UTC)
Worth the wait? Yes. Unsettling? Also yes. But for all that, I'm glad you decided to share anyway. Thank you!
7th-Sep-2013 04:59 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm happy you enjoyed it.
6th-Sep-2013 12:13 pm (UTC)
”…and make Arthur – Arthur Shappey – the Big Bad?!

I can hear that in Douglas’s voice actually!

It’s always interesting to read about the though processes and creative processes behind authors’ writing, so thanks very much for sharing this.

I’m sure you’ll have many more than six readers!!
7th-Sep-2013 05:01 pm (UTC)
I've been blown away by just how many people have commented here and on AO3 and FF. I know that a lot of people don't read crossovers, which is why I didn't really want to go to the effort of writing it, but I'm chuffed to bits that lots of people gave this one a try.

And sometimes I enjoy writing the author's notes more than writing the actual story!
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7th-Sep-2013 05:02 pm (UTC)
She's a bit of a menace, my plotbunny, with her weird ideas but somehow they seem to work out. I and she are delighted that you liked the story. Thanks for commenting.
7th-Sep-2013 04:47 am (UTC)
Anonymous
I think the "plotbunny" (whatever that is X-)) gave you an excellent idea. :-) I thought it was a very well thought out and well written (and nicely ship-free ;-)) story, and I loved how it was all about the mind and the heart, which is exactly what Sherlock and John, respectively, are all about... therefore it fit the characters perfectly. :-) Like I said in the comments at the end of chapter 3, I don't know what it is you do for a living, but if you're not a professional writer, you bloody well should be. :-) I should get a Livejournal account already since I'm very much enjoying your writing, and I've posted so many anonymous comments here and nobody knows who on God's green earth I am. X-)
7th-Sep-2013 05:09 pm (UTC)
When fanfic (and perhaps other) writers get ideas for stories, they call them plotbunnies because they tend to breed really quickly and before you know it you've got several different stories all urging you to write them. When I was having a dry spell my friend Verity Burns sent me a real toy bunny wearing a T-shirt saying "Get thinking!" on it. The bunny's name is Verity Bun and she used to sit on my desk at work and poke me with ideas at very inappropriate times, but I brought her home when I was on holiday and she now lives in the bedroom with my teddy bears and seems to have fallen in love with one of them, so I haven't dared separate them. Despite the great romance, Verity Bun still pokes me with ideas when I'm least expecting them!

I'm so glad you liked this (almost) ship-free story, and thank you for your lovely comments!
7th-Sep-2013 06:00 pm (UTC)
Ah... I get it now... "plotbunny" makes perfect sense. :-) So now I have a name for those times when I see/hear/read something and think, "Wouldn't it be cool if they did a story where..." and then my habit of thinking and then over-thinking kicks in, leaving my brain running through 7 or 8 different plot lines. X-)
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10th-Sep-2013 12:25 pm (UTC)
HEY!! *runs to cover plotbunny's eyes*

Actually, it's probably not a good idea threatening her like that. You'll only make her worse ...
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7th-Oct-2013 08:33 am (UTC) - I know what she does for a living....
Anonymous
....and her talent is WASTED! This is a response to comment on 7th Sept from anonymous who says Ariane DeVere should be a professional writer- I agree!! I keep asking her to consider an original story- she has talent, skill and loves words- everything a good writer needs.

All of her writing buddies need to start a campaign to get her to get some original stuff out there, she won't listen to me, I'm just a colleague, who loves what's he writes.
7th-Oct-2013 09:09 am (UTC) - Re: I know what she does for a living....
You are adorable, Ki. Thank you so much.

As for an original story - tell it to the plotbunny!!
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