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Ariane DeVere
Sherlock fic: Proper Genius 
9th-Aug-2011 09:29 pm
Sherlock - shut up I'm geniusing

Title: Proper Genius
Author: Ariane DeVere
Word count: 221
Rating: PG

It’s another 221B (221 words with the final word beginning with ‘b’)




Proper Genius

Sally always said he would end up becoming a killer through sheer boredom.

When he paces around restlessly with nothing to do, his best and only friend watches with concern and does his best to keep him distracted and busy; and he knows that his brother worries about him, constantly.

It’s hard being a genius, with a mind that never stops working even when it has nothing to work on. The sheer frustration of knowing he is smarter than everybody around him – that there’s nobody with whom he can spar on an equal level – makes him want to scream with rage sometimes.

And then Sally divorces him and takes away his beloved children, his best friend gets married and moves abroad, and his brother’s busy with his own work. And then the aneurism diagnosis comes, and now he doesn’t care any more; all he wants to do is to outlive other people. Everyone’s so stupid – they deserve to die. He hears the first whispers about the mysterious “Moriarty” and finally tracks him – or them? – down and is put on the path to a less boring finale to his life.

But though he thinks he can see how everything will unwind, like a map inside his head, even he doesn’t have the faintest idea that it will all end with a bullet.


Comments 
9th-Aug-2011 09:25 pm (UTC)
Ok, I read that 5 times, still not sure I get it. *is stupid*

But, oh! 'Bullet' is a great b-word! :)
10th-Aug-2011 11:42 am (UTC)
Jesus freaking Christ! The Cabbie???
*double-facepalm*

You are a genius!!!

9th-Aug-2011 09:27 pm (UTC)
ooh, very clever!
9th-Aug-2011 09:39 pm (UTC)
Oooh, clever! I didn't see THAT coming.
9th-Aug-2011 09:41 pm (UTC)
Yay, go you getting an inspiration and posting the result all in one day... brilliant!

Love the cabbie's eye view, and the echoing of his lines is very effective, I can really hear Phil Davis talking about the map inside his head... chilling.

So clever, my dear :D
9th-Aug-2011 10:07 pm (UTC)
more alike than they might think, indeed.
well done!
9th-Aug-2011 11:37 pm (UTC)
Well done.
10th-Aug-2011 12:31 am (UTC)
Oh you horrid horrid creature!

This is brilliant but at first it was horrible! I did not get it *at all.* And actually I wonder if replacing 3-4 words near the end will help clarify it.

The only reason I finally figured it out was through reading the comments.
10th-Aug-2011 12:32 am (UTC)
Then again I suppose the title should have sort of given it away...
10th-Aug-2011 12:59 am (UTC)
That one was really clever! Well done. :)
10th-Aug-2011 02:19 am (UTC)
Terribly, wonderfully clever. Great fic!
10th-Aug-2011 02:23 am (UTC)
It did take me a second, but ooooh, very good!
10th-Aug-2011 03:07 am (UTC)
Amazing twist, definitely didn't see that coming!
16th-Aug-2011 07:50 pm (UTC)
Sorry, it's not a comment, but I'd like to send you a private message and I can't because you've enabled the privacy options for your messages. Is there another way I can contact you ? Thank you.
16th-Aug-2011 10:54 pm (UTC)
I really haven't. Others are able to PM me with no problem, so I'm puzzled why you can't. Is this in reply to my PM to you? If so, let me know and I'll PM you an email address.

Ari
17th-Aug-2011 11:57 am (UTC)
*applauds*

liked this twisty 221b very much!
18th-Sep-2011 06:51 pm (UTC)
Damn. Very good.
12th-Aug-2012 04:27 pm (UTC)
Interesting!
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